Improve descriptions on eveningstar, double+triple sword
Posted: Tuesday, 10th August 2021, 11:45I have some flavor suggestions which are entirely pedantic, but they've bugged me long enough that I feel like bringing them up:
Eveningstar
The "eveningstar" in Crawl is meant to be a joke, a play on "morningstar" (a real weapon). The joke is fine - I actually think eveningstar is a really cool name, something unique to Crawl, and puts me in mind of some dark metal weapon that's basically a souped-up morningstar.
However, the description doesn't really tell you anything about it:
I'd honestly like to know, for flavor purposes, what the weapon I'm holding actually looks like. (Also, "opposite" is misleading; does it do negative damage? Is it light, rather than heavy? Do you hold it the other way?)
Double and triple swords
The argument about the real-world effectiveness of double and triple swords has been had before so I won't reiterate it here; again, my issue is with the description. Why is this weapon magical? Is it because magic is the only way to make such a weapon practical? What does the magic do? Is it affected by antimagic? How are the multiple blades oriented with respect to each other? Is the double-sword double-ended, like Thanos' sword? Are the blades arranged in parallel, or do they all lie in the same plane?
Suggested alternatives
My suggestions could be improved, but I think they capture the look of the weapon while retaining the original intent.
Eveningstar
The "eveningstar" in Crawl is meant to be a joke, a play on "morningstar" (a real weapon). The joke is fine - I actually think eveningstar is a really cool name, something unique to Crawl, and puts me in mind of some dark metal weapon that's basically a souped-up morningstar.
However, the description doesn't really tell you anything about it:
The opposite of a morningstar.
I'd honestly like to know, for flavor purposes, what the weapon I'm holding actually looks like. (Also, "opposite" is misleading; does it do negative damage? Is it light, rather than heavy? Do you hold it the other way?)
Double and triple swords
A magical weapon with two razor-sharp blades.
A magical weapon with three great razor-sharp blades.
The argument about the real-world effectiveness of double and triple swords has been had before so I won't reiterate it here; again, my issue is with the description. Why is this weapon magical? Is it because magic is the only way to make such a weapon practical? What does the magic do? Is it affected by antimagic? How are the multiple blades oriented with respect to each other? Is the double-sword double-ended, like Thanos' sword? Are the blades arranged in parallel, or do they all lie in the same plane?
Suggested alternatives
My suggestions could be improved, but I think they capture the look of the weapon while retaining the original intent.
Eveningstar
The opposite of a morningstar. A balanced mace with a long shaft and a metal head covered in lethal spikes.
Double sword
A fearsome weapon with a forked, razor-sharp blade.
Triple sword
A formidable weapon created by a master craftsman. The blade of the sword forks into three great razor-sharp edges.
